The M is too far away and try varying the heights of your lls so it doesn't look like just some typed font.
It's OK but I don't like the heavy black drop shadow on the first red version.
The second red one seems like you are relying on the black stepped-off outline to try and pop out the words.
Try it in burgundy, with no black outline, and a stepped-off light grey drop shadow.
You always have to be careful when using red and black together.
Love....Jill
PS I think you eliminated the apostrophe because there's none in that font.
Just borrow one from a similar letterstyle.